This is getting better. I like the pace of the voice overs and you are using more close ups, however you aren't using enough. I also don't see a cut away to the face of the student creating the artwork. The two trash can shots are too similar to be put next to each other like that. That a jump cut. Either zoom in more or use a different shot of maybe the actual garbage dump or landfill there. Your chicken shot also needs a cut in to a closer shot. The shot you have shakes at the end. When listing the items you need, keep them separate and zoom in more. I don't want to have to look at a wide shot to figure out what items are what. If you use a close up and only show me that item, there is nothing for me to have to think about since that's the only thing to look at. You also need to choose one location for the entire video. You have shots from the library and then outside by the cafeteria. Stick to one to keep things consistent. Also show me a cap that's already colored, instead of keeping that one shot outside the cafe up for so long. Find a colored cap and then shoot a close up of the cap being removed. The next two shots of the tape are badly out of focus and need to be redone. Here is where you can insert that shot of the person doing the activity. You also need to show me a different shot of the completed pieces. You already used that shot earlier. Don't reuse any shots....ever. Always use different shots. Your last shot also has a long black bar on the left side.
This is getting better but it still needs more work. Let's improve in the areas I noted. Good to great!
3 points = B
Hi my name Kate and this is my first year in the CKTV media productions class!