Interesting idea, using influence as the main word in your message. I can kinda see it as he's trying to be a social media influencer with promoting the vape mod and having promo codes. The problem is that we can't see who he's influencing. What audience is he trying to reach? Could we maybe see another student watching the vid on their own device and then trying it themselves? That would make more sense based on what your message is. He also seems to cough a lot and I was thinking that maybe you would tie that in somehow. I'm not sure that the coughing is necessary here since it doesn't do anything to move your message along. Let's go back and refilm some of this with these changes as I think you're onto something here with the whole "influencer" thing. I just want to see that message clearer using other students who see it and then try it on their own. Let's talk in class more about this. 3.2 points
Hi I'm Kate and this second year in media!